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How is the following sentence improved by the revision?

Original sentence: Hester was judged by the community for her sin.

Revision: The community judged Hester for her sin.

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1.improves connotation

2. deletes repetitive words

3. uses more descriptive language

4. removes passive voice and correctly places modifier

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Answer:

4. removes passive voice and correctly places modifier

Step-by-step explanation:

The given sentence is improved by the revision by removing the passive voice and correctly places modifier.

From the original and revised sentences, "Hester was judged by the community for her sin" is changed to "The community judged Hester for her sin" which turns the passive voice to active voice and places the modifier correctly.

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