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So I wrote a poem..

Am I floating?
Or drowning?
I feel myself drifting away
Flashbacks appear in my mind
I try to fight them away
Their grip is too tight
I lose myself again
As I remember the window
rain drops, dripping down
I stare out towards the trees
As you drove with anger
The tears I could not control
They moved so freely
At the hospital we arrived
You forced me inside
As your voice repeats in my head
As an endless cycle
I know I messed up
But nobody sees
I kept this wall
I stood up tall
Did you know I was breaking?
Falling apart?
I promise I am not faking
Please do not be mad
It just gets so hard
When everything is so dark

-hannah

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User Errata
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This is amazing!!!

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User Gutelaunetyp
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Answer:

woooooww... I lovee this!! It's so good and meaningful! <3. It seems deep and sad too. Sometimes writing poems is a way to let out how your feeling. That's what I always told myself. It's perfect! It's a poem you wrote. There reallly isn't anything wrong. No one can say it's wrong because poems are for expressing feelings!..

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Good job! Writing poems are always fun!.. Hope all is well and have a wonderful day! <33

"You were born to be real, not perfect"

User Andre Vianna
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