Question

I want to join Math & Science club. They gave me a question, “Please tell us why you would like to be part in the Math & Science club?”

My answer is:
I would like to be part of the Math & Science Academy because I want to build social skills and self-esteem, and improve my grade. I want to improve my skills and experience in leadership, communication, problem-solving, group development and management, presentation and public speaking. Even though being a leader is difficult for me, I still want to learn how to be a leader and be more successful in the future. I don’t talk much usually, I’m more of an introverted girl and don’t like to talk much, and that’s also the reason why I want to improve my social skills, public speaking skills, and leadership.

Can someone check if my answer(writing) is good enough? Thank you!!

Answer 1

I think your writing is well! You over use the term 'and' though, so perhaps you can remove 'and' in certain areas such as the lists. EX: "The cat, dog, and bird". other then that it's great!