Question

Can yall give me some critique on this? Its for music class, Thank you!

Crash, burn
The whole world goes up in
Smoke and flames
Poisoning the air
People can be toxic
But not me I’m not toxic
They say hell and heaven is where you go when you die
But I say no that’s where you go when your alive!

People are demons and people are angels
It’s hard to determine who is what
You can go and walk around the whole entire town
There can be people crowded all around
But you never know which ones good and which ones are bad
They can act like an angel
But really be a demon

People can be good when you first meet them
But then after a while they start to show their true colors
So, you better watch your back because if you don’t
It might just end up resulting in a heartbreak

Answer 1

Very Good Job; I was reading through this and making inferences about what you were going to say next but you surprised me; at the ending, you might want to get more of a rhyme,
Good Job