Read the paragraph.
I went skiing. I was riddled with anxiety. The mountain was so steep and high, and the chair lifts were so rickety! I couldn’t even exit the lift without falling down, let alone actually ski down a hill. I gained confidence and made it all the way down a green run. I started to really enjoy myself and began to seek out more challenging hills.
Which revision most effectively uses transitions to clarify the sequence of events?
A. First of all, I went skiing. Unfortunately, I was riddled with anxiety. The mountain was so steep and high, and the chair lifts were so rickety! I couldn’t even exit the lift without falling down, let alone actually ski down a hill. Luckily, I gained confidence and made it all the way down a green run. Amazingly, I started to really enjoy myself and began to seek out more challenging hills.
B. The first time I went skiing, I was riddled with anxiety. The mountain was so steep and high, and the chair lifts were so rickety! For hours and hours that morning, I couldn’t even exit the lift without falling down, let alone actually ski down a hill. As the day wore on, though, I gained confidence and made it all the way down a green run. The next time I went skiing, I started to really enjoy myself and began to seek out more challenging hills.
C. When I went skiing, I was riddled with anxiety. Later, the mountain was so steep and high, and the chair lifts were so rickety! Likewise, I couldn’t even exit the lift without falling down, let alone actually ski down a hill. I gained confidence and made it all the way down a green run, though. Therefore, I started to really enjoy myself and began to seek out more challenging hills.
D. I went skiing, and I was riddled with anxiety. Ahead of me, the mountain was so steep and high, and the chair lifts were so rickety! That day, I couldn’t even exit the lift without falling down, let alone actually ski down a hill. Later, I gained confidence and made it all the way down a green run. Most importantly, I started to really enjoy myself and began to seek out more challenging hills.