Answer:
hmm it was pretty good honestly and it carried a message which is great!
Step-by-step explanation:
for a good poem you need a
-message- without a message then the story(the poem) will be boring and it wont work
-it DOESNT ALWAYS have to rhyme!- not all poems need to have a rhyme to be exciting or funny! a lot of poems are actually better without rhyme!
- go with your first instinct- by this i mean go with a plan and make a story and stick with it(make it work)
-u can have plan b's but stick with the A- the plan A is what you original thought of and you thought it was pretty good! thats why u made it an A right?...
-never give up ad make things work!-