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Which revision would most improve this excerpt from a narrative?

When Tyler got the message on his phone that there was a protest at
city hall, he jumped out of bed, grabbed his camera, and ran to the
scene. Tyler loved to be in the middle of things, documenting them
through photographs. He had been an avid photographer since he was
fourteen after a beloved mentor gave him his first camera. Now he was
a professional news photographer, taking photographs of local
residents and exciting events.
OA. Talking more about what kind of work Tyler does
B. Discussing Tyler's love for photography in more detail
C. Describing Tyler's camera equipment
OD. Explaining who Tyler's mentor was

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talking more about what kind of work tyler does
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Answer: Which revision would most improve this excerpt from a narrative? Answer: Talking more about what kind of work Tyler does.

Explanation: This is the answer because if the answer was C. or D. you would not be focusing on the main character; to improve the narrative, you should give more detail on the primary person/character.

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