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Please give me some opinions on my introduction for my essay. (50 points)

Please give me some opinions on my introduction for my essay. (50 points)-example-1

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Honestly its pretty good writing and I think your going at the right pace I believe this is a informational writing so I would personally give this 90 its just that there isn't a hook that makes me want to read the information but other than that I would give it a 90

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