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How does my poem sound?

I was as brave as a lion,
But I was told I was like contamination,
It was like being in hospitalization.

But love is a disease, it has no bounds.
And whilst a disease is love, it will pass around.
Love may be gone as quick as sound.

It will come like lugini,
It even feels like a bowl of rotini,
But love has escaped more than Houdini.

I felt like the sky throwing lighting around,
The wind slapped my face as I was wondering about,
The sky and I were crying with a fraught,
I left like the birds, not making a sound.

That switzer sister,
She was with another mister,
He even just kissed her.

I thought patience always pays,
I waited for days,
I just went for the bays.

I jumped in hands behind my back,
I sorrowed my day, jumped in the bay,
On my back,
I fell with a 'Crack',
There was a 'Smack',
I left with a 'Splash'.

User Dmitry Manannikov
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The poem was awesome!
Good Work
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Answer:

ITS VERYYY GOOD.GREAT JOB!!

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