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When Emma was little, she loved to color. As a busy high school student, she doesn't have much free time. Her swim practice was canceled, so she decided to grab her colored pencils and her little sister's coloring book and get to work. She sat down and began to fill in the blank shapes with beautiful pastels. She decided to head outside with her art supplies. She continued to color in the fresh air , and she felt so relaxed. She heard her mom calling her for dinner Emma loved spending the day doing something so peaceful. Rewrite the paragraph above adding transition words or phrases to make the shifts in time frame and setting more clear in at least four sentences. Add at least two transitions to signal a shift in time and two transitions to signal a shift in setting.​

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When Emma was little, she loved to colour but now she’s in high school and doesn’t have much free time. Today her swim practice was canceled, so she decided to grab her coloured pencils and her little sisters colouring book and got to work, she sat down and began to fill in the blank shapes with beautiful pastels, after a while she decided to go colour in the fresh air, she felt so relaxed sitting outside. After a while she heard her mum calling her for dinner, she sat a little longer before she went inside because she loved spending her day doing something so peaceful.
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