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Hi can someone plss help me checking my essay? (don't just say it is good ) I just wanted to know if it flows good and if Im giving a good explanation. (which I put 2 images of the question and the topic) (If there is something wrong or if I need to add please tell me!)

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First off, why is this in the mathematics section lol. Anyways, the essay looks good, but you can remove some unnecessary information. The reader doesn't need to know that the author is 14. Knowing the age of an author won't help support your argument.

Also, you say, "For example during the pandemic situation there were some quick changes to it like the vaccines being made...".

I would say instead, "During the pandemic, there were some rapid changes that took place to correct the pandemic like the vaccines being made...". Other than that, the essay looks good!

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