Question

How does this poem sound from 1 to 10

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Vitamins from the Sun

The rays shine through the clouds,
Warming my pale body,
Shielding me from negativity,
Feeding me with Vitamin D.

Warming my pale body,
Providing a blanket of heat around me,
Feeding me with Vitamin D.
As time seems to become locked in the clock,

Providing a blanket of heat around me,
I am wearing the sun on my skin;
As time seems to become locked in the clock,
Rays from the sun fall heavily.

I am wearing the sun on my skin,
Engulfing my soul.
Rays from the sun fall heavily,
It feels so close, yet it is so far.

Engulfing my soul,
Shielding me from the negativity.
It feels so close, yet it is so far;
The rays shine through the clouds,

Answer 1

8/10 I really like it

Answer 2

8/10, it’s a very good poem, the repetition of ‘sun on my skin’ and about vitamin d makes it very good :)