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The Rock once said, “Don't focus on the pain, focus on the progress” (www.quotespedia.org).In the emotional book, Touching Spirit Bear, by Ben Mikealson. the character Cole Mathews did not focus on the past, he focused on the present."Touching Spirit Bear"the protagonist is Cole Matthews. He is a troubled teenager that gets in trouble for injuring and harrassing a peer by the name of Peter Driscal. He does this because of some anger issues that he is dealing with. His offences were serious, so he was facing a lot of jail time. His parole officer believes that Cole can change and he doesnt deserve this so instead of sending him to jail he gets him into a program that they call Circle Justice. Cole has become more confident and courageous in the book by changing from naughty to loyal.
Cole becomes a better person throughout the book, he becomes more confident and courageous. You can see a clear change because in the beginning he was making bad decisions for himself and while he experiences all of the ups and downs in this program he grows as a person. In one scene of the book Cole burned a cabin down. This shows that Cole is not making the right decisions, he acts out and does something drastic. Although this is true, later in the same scene Cole cries expressing his emotions which tells the readers that he knows what he did was wrong and deep down he wants to do better and change. In another scene of the book Cole decides to make dinner for everyone. This shows that he has changed and become loyal. He shows that he cares about others and wants to have joy in his life, he worked hard and showed that he respected others. Another way that shows Cole's improvements is when he hugs his mom. He is showing her that he cares and that he has changed into a better person.
Cole has become more confident and courageous in the book by changing from naughty to loyal. In the emotional book, Touching Spirit Bear, by Ben Mikealson the character Cole Mathews did not focus on the past he focused on the present. Touching Spirit Bear is about this kid named Cole. Cole has anger issues and beat up a kid because he snitched on him. He got sent to the Circle Justice and they sentenced him to an island to survive and to try to get away from his anger issues.Cole has become more confident and courageous throughout the book by changing from naughty to loyal

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You could change some of the word choice to make it sound more professional, but overall it's good enough for a passing grade :)

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