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I went to school feeling foggy and distressed my head in scrabbles. I hated every minute being there. The thick air not being able to breathe and the voices of thoses infuriating, juvilan foolish people I attend school with and my bothersome teacher a typical day for me.Little did I know it would be the worst day of my life.

My homeroom teacher work in as usual but he seemed a little different he had a frantic look on his face was shivering. He looks at the class and yelled “it's coming to get me help!” and gore a knife into his neck. Blood splattered everywhere it was like a homicide scene people starting screaming and vomiting it was a bloody nightmare. One student screamed ‘the curse of mangrove is here” the entire class went in silence.

The old folk tale that happens in 1986 when Hajime Kobayashi of class 9 who was mysteriously found hanging from his throat in the old school building some say he was profusely bullied by his classmates you can find markings of Hajime's signature in the old school building where he dies. People say that students and teachers associated with class 9 die mysteriously along with their family around the time of his death. ‘Ha Hajime Kobayashi killed the homeroom teacher” I yelled in a sarcastic tone at the student I could not believe someone just died and he was joking around

I went to call a grown up but to my surprise we were the only one here I saw a mysterious figure with pale skin black hair and green eyes walking down the corridor ‘who could it be’ I muttered to myself following the figure into the old school building. My body went heavy for a minute as I entered the old school building calling out to that figure ‘hey hey are you ok’ I saw carvings on the wall looking like a plead for help I wondered what it could be. When I realized I had arrived at the old class nine class and that mysterious figure appeared to me again Referring to himself as hajime Kobayashi. Seeing his figure made me tremble I can taste the fair my mouth. ‘He said “you're just like me let me help you out” and disappeared I forgot all about the grown up and ran back to my class “that was strange” when I arrive to my classroom all my classmates with dead and the police in front of the class they said that all my classmates were dead and asked me questions pertaining to the incident ‘ I just left a minute ago why is everyone now dead” remembering what that mysterious figure told me ‘I will help you out’

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there are little kids on this app, use a trigger warning or something.
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Could use a trigger warning you know

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