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Bart was 16 years old when he moved to New Jersey. He was not happy because there were very

few kids his age in his new neighborhood. During the winter, he watched his elderly neighbor, Mr.
Jones, remove snow from his sidewalk. After watching, he would go back to playing video games. In
the summer, Bart wanted to go swimming in Mr. Jones's pool but was afraid to ask.

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Answer:

In the story, a few things can be changed.

Step-by-step explanation:

Bart was 16 years old when he moved to New Jersey. He was not happy because there were few kids of his age in the new neighborhood. During the winter, he watched his elderly neighbor, Mr. Jones, and helped him to remove snow from the sidewalk. Later, he would go back to play video games. In the summer, Bart wanted to go swimming in Mr. Jones’s pool but he was afraid to ask.

In the text, there are a few changes. Bart helped Mr. Johnes to remove snow from the sidewalk. Due to the first version of he did not just watch, he helped the neighbor. After helping he played video games. Interventions in the text made Bart more sensitive and helpful.

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