Question

PLEASE HELP ME REVISE MY AXEXES ESSAY !!

The leavers by Lisa Ko is a story about a boy named Deming Guo who assumes his mother abandoned him after a sudden disappearance in his life, later on we come to find out how she was not running away from but was held captive by immigration services for 14 months and later was deported back to China. Deming Guo’s mother was not at fault. Deming changes throughout the book through the relationships he gains after his mother's disappearance. In The Leavers one example would be: “After a few weeks, the wooden floors of the Wilkinsons’ house no longer felt so slippery, and when people said “Daniel” he answered, didn't think they were talking to someone else. No longer did Peter and Kay look as unusual to him, the shade of their skin and the shape of their noses as the low buzz of the empty streets, and he didn't always remember to dial his mother's phone number at night” (Ko 63). From this quote you can conclude the protagonist Deming has gone through many changes in so little time he has accepted himself as who he now is and who the people he is living with are, he is a strong kid. He now has grown to make his own decisions and has grown to be motivated in life and not live under an adult shadow and someone to depend on. In The Leavers another good example would be: '' Maybe he would come back to Fuzhou after New Year's. Either way, it was incredible to decide something. He had never allowed himself to fully trust his choices before” (Ko 331). Also from this quote, you can conclude that Deming Guo has finally grown as a person, and from when he was confused on whether to do music with his friend Roland or listening to Peter and Kay’s Advice on going to college and living the stereotypical successful American life. Lisa Ko did an amazing job at character building throughout the book and how she made Deming go through so much as a child through his adult life. It seemed like he would always have it rough but when he finds himself his life changes for the better instead of having people plan out his life for him. Deming needed to go through that to grow and mature as a person and to be more than a little Asian boy.

Answer 1

I just took out the unnecessary words and put better words in place for others. If you're looking for more of a peer review, the essay is fine just get rid of the extra stuff.

Step-by-step explanation:

The Leavers by Lisa Ko is a story about a boy named Deming Guo who assumes his mother abandoned him after a sudden disappearance in his life, later on we come to find out how she was not running away from but was held captive by immigration services for 14 months and was deported back to China. Deming Guo’s mother was not at fault. Deming changes throughout the book through the relationships he gains after his mother's disappearance. In The Leavers one example would be: “After a few weeks, the wooden floors of the Wilkinson's’ house no longer felt so slippery, and when people said “Daniel” he answered, didn't think they were talking to someone else. No longer did Peter and Kay look as unusual to him, the shade of their skin and the shape of their noses as the low buzz of the empty streets, and he didn't always remember to dial his mother's phone number at night” (Ko 63). From this quote you can conclude the protagonist, Deming, has gone through many changes in so little time he has accepted himself as who he now is and who the people he is living with are, he is a strong kid. He now has grown to make his own decisions and has grown to be motivated in life and not live under an adult shadow and someone to depend on. In The Leavers another good example would be: '' Maybe he would come back to Fuzhou after New Year's. Either way, it was incredible to decide something. He had never allowed himself to fully trust his choices before” (Ko 331). Also from this quote, you can conclude that Deming Guo has finally grown as a person, and from when he was confused on whether to do music with his friend Roland or listening to Peter and Kay’s Advice on going to college to live the stereotypical American life. Lisa Ko did an amazing job at character building throughout the book and how she made Deming go through so much as a child through his adult life. It seemed like he would always have it rough but when he finds himself his life would change for the better instead of having people plan out his life for him. Deming needed to go through that to age and mature as a person and to be more than a boy with a rough childhood.