Question

Please go over the first three paragraphs I have written so far! lmk what to add or change! (the requirement is 8 or more sentences per paragraph)

( question is, what is the allure of fear?) (will report fake answers and bots)

Fear, we all have heard the word, but what exactly causes us to enjoy such a thing? One of the most enticing things about being afraid is the adrenaline rush you feel, the high you get from something so horrifying.”An adrenaline rush begins in the brain. When you perceive a dangerous or stressful situation, that information is sent to a part of the brain called the amygdala. This area of the brain plays a role in emotional processing.” (Healthline, Pg1, Paragraph6)Of course, most of these feelings only come from knowing you are in a safe environment, while still having that scary creature, or spooky experience. Something such as haunted houses or a scary movie can bring that feeling to some individuals.



Another factor of fear is the feeling of closeness it can bring to people, such as romantic interests, family, or friends. Being scared in a fun way vs being actually afraid are two very different things. While being afraid in a fun way can be a good bonding experience. A life or death situation may not be the best way to connect with someone “.If we're in real danger, we're focused on survival, not fun. But if we trigger the high arousal response in a safe space (watching a movie, going on a rollercoaster, etc.), your body is safe to enter the euphoric state of being scared while simultaneously having fun. 3. It's Normal To Enjoy Some Fear Responses And Not Others.” (Bustle, Marissa Higgins, beginning summed up paragraphs 1, 2,and 3.)


Scary experiences in a safe environment can also show courage and make someone feel proud of getting through said experience. Someone showing strength and bravery in a scary situation can also be a way of them showing off to the other people around them. For example, someone is scared to go into a haunted house. The person goes in anyways and feels gratification for being able to conquer their fear. “Some people enjoy "pushing the envelope," seeking thrills, and seeing how much fear can be tolerated. If they are able to endure the barrage of anxiety, suspense, and fear, a great sense of self-satisfaction is often experienced. I’ll never forget being scared out of my mind watching The Shining when I was 12 years old, but also being quite proud of myself for making it through the entirety of the film without turning my head away!” (Psychology today, pg 1, paragraph 3)

Answer 1

Your paragraphs are very good! It was a very interesting read! However, there were a few mistakes that I pointed out and I also gave a few tips on citing sources. I hope this feedback is useful to you. I hope you use MLA format because that is what I talked about in the sources.

Step-by-step explanation:

When you perceive a dangerous or stressful situation, that information is sent to a part of the brain called the amygdala. This area of the brain plays a role in emotional processing” (Healthline, Pg1, Paragraph6).

Put the period after the parentheses.

Also, make sure to put spaces after your periods.

Of course, most of these feelings only come from knowing you are in a safe environment, while still having that scary creature, or spooky experience.

Remove the comma after creature; it's unnecessary.

Being scared in a fun way vs being actually afraid are two very different things. Write 'vs' fully. So like 'versus' It's more proper.

While being afraid in a fun way can be a good bonding experience. Put a comma here, not a period. A life or death situation may not be the best way to connect with someone

Remember, periods always go inside the quotation marks

Also, when citing sources write the author's name in parentheses. If there is no author, put the article's name. like this for example: ("Article Name")

If there are page numbers then do it like this: ("Article/Author Name" 1)

You do not need paragraph numbers.

And if there are no pages, just put the article or author's name. This information is for MLA citations in MLA 9.

Also, when you write article titles, make sure to capitalize the beginning of important words. For example: Psychology Today