Question

Read the following excerpt from a student essay. How can the writer best improve his or her

sentence fluency?
Allergies are quite common. Allergies occur in about two out of every ten Americans. In
people with allergies, the immune system is hypersensitive to a harmless substance in
the environment. These substances are called allergens and include things like pollen,
dust, pet dander, and mold. Reactions to allergens include sneezing; itchy, watery eyes;
runny nose; rashes or hives; and feeling tired or sick.
by combining the last two sentences
by using shorter sentences
by adding transitions between shntences
by combining repetitive sentences

Answer 1

Allergies are quite common, they occur in about 2 in every 10 Americans. The immune system in people with allergies is hypersensitive to harmless substances in the environment; the substances are called allergens and include things like: pollen, dust, pet dander and mold and they cause sneezing, itchy watery eyes, runny nose, rashes or hives and tiredness.


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