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Quick question!!

I’m writing an essay on Nelson Mandela. I wanted to end it with

“ He could easily be described as the light at the end of a seemingly ceaseless tunnel of injustice”

Does this make sense? Is it okay? Any ways to improve it?

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Answer:

It's great! But one suggestion...

Step-by-step explanation:

Get rid of "seemingly", makes the statement more final! You might even want to change up "He could easily be described as" to something more confident and final, like "He is" (maybe make it more fancy, up to you). Hope this helps :)

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