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Hi can someone please help me with this!! I'm having trouble into writing the 2nd paragraph of the essay because I have to include in-text citation and I don't know how to include that and if Im repeating what Im saying in the first paragraph. Also could my entire essay be checked by anyone? Like for content and stuff like that? Please!?

PS: *The "blue writing" that is highlighted in the essay is some small notes that I wrote down*




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Hi can someone please help me with this!! I'm having trouble into writing the 2nd-example-1
Hi can someone please help me with this!! I'm having trouble into writing the 2nd-example-1
Hi can someone please help me with this!! I'm having trouble into writing the 2nd-example-2
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Here is a way that I personally would rephrase it (great story btw) also sorry that I couldnt help with the second part.

Step-by-step explanation:

A goddess that I closely relate to is Demeter. Characteristics of Demeter include being an extremely overprotective mother to her daughter, Persephone, and getting easily over stressed. She cares very deeply for Persephone and would sacrifice anything for her. Honestly, I relate to that as being a person, but being 15 years old, I can not relate to the mother part of her traits. Almost everyday, I feel different types of emotions depending on the situation. I get over- stressed, like Demeter, over the smallest inconveniences to the point where I can't control myself. The other characteristic that I share with Demeter is being highly overprotective towards my youngest sibling even when I have been repeatedly told not to, I just want her to have the best and be protected, as well as help her with school.

A myth about Demeter that caught my eye was her getting raped by Hades, the god of the underworld. I found this interesting because of the way she was able to handle this type of horrific situation being a mom. For example, in a part of the myth, it states that "Demeter roamed the earth over in search of her, by day and by night with torches. When she learned from the Hermonians that Hades had kidnapped her, enraged at the gods she left the sky and in likeness of a woman made her way to Eleusis". This shows that Demeter is a strong woman who can not just focus on her self, but on others as well.

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