While and after reading the student sample (written below), identify and
explain three things this essay did well in regards to Statement of
Purpose/Focus and Organization.
Grade 10 Student Scoring Sample
It is generally accepted that nearly every culture has some version of a robe or tunic. The garment has been
simply and relatively cheaply made by a means of one or two pieces of fabric. To compensate for the difficulty
in obtaining fabric, far less time and effort would be spent on the actual creation of the garment. Since the
advent of this type of clothing, however, people's style and the methods of clothes production have changed
radically
The Renaissance brought about a drastic change in common clothing. Fitted clothes became more popular and
appreciated for their style. Since ntted clothes were made by sewing several pieces of fabric together, more
fabric was needed to make the new stylish clothes. Around the 17th century, clothing was not only ntted, but
also increasingly flashy in style. With the use of embroidery and gemstones, along with an emphasis on skilled
talloring, clothing also served as a strong indicator of wealth and prosperity.
According to "Talloring by the 19th and 20th centuries, these styles were replaced by ones that were
restrained and practical? The ntted style of dress remained, but there was no longer the desire to be
flamboyant with clothing. In order to ensure the best nt. consumers sought the most renowned tailors
However, not all could afford this custom service. Making clothes at home remained a widely used method of
production Ready-made clothing, the most prominent replacement to custom and home-made clothing, came
at different times for men and women. Toward the end of the 19th century, as the Civil War progressed, men's
garment production changed significantly. The number of soldiers continued to increase, so the demand for
military uniforms increased as well. As a result, a number of factories were built with the sole purpose of
for a lower price than making the uniforms at home. Data for standard sizes was