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Can anyone please send any feedbacks to this poetry if it’s good or bad It’s my first one

“A leaf”

a leaf lingers in slow breeze

a leaf are words and caterpillar engulfed it
selfish thought just to make its wings
why won't the leaf shoo it?

slow breeze became faster
from drizzles to Snow and cold
Self conscious trees, it’s leaves are falling
trying to keep it still

It transform to a butterfly

Soil absorbing water after snow
A leaf emerged
and hold still

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User Ela Buwa
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10/10 amazing in my opinion

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