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Hewo Fellow Human!!

Halloween is coming soon...
and I need some feedback on a new scary story that me and my sis did for a school project!!
Here it is.....
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The Haunted Library

One day, there was a librarian who was in the library with her daughter. The girl was named Emily. Emily was looking around for something to do in the library until it opened. Then she saw a room that was blocked so no one could go in. While Emily’s mom was busy ordering books, Emily snuck in that room. When Emily went in there she noticed that the room had old bookshelves that were filled with rusty old books that were all burnt and torn apart. She walked around and found a radio and decided to turn it on. When she turned it on, it was playing music but it didn’t really sound good since it was broken. Then she found an old newspaper that showed a little girl with her parents. The newspaper was talking about how her and her parents died because of a fire that turned on at their house. While she was reading the article, she felt something pull her hair. She looked at what it was and she couldn’t believe it. It was the little girl from the newspaper, but she’s supposed to be dead, Emily thought. The little girl had an evil smile on her face and pulled her hair harder. Then a fire lit up on top of the bookshelves. It was turning bigger and bigger. The fire burnt one of the parts in a book and it flew and landed on Emily’s face. Emily started to cry and looked at the little girl, who was called Ava. Ava’s face then turned all rusty looking and burnt. She had a big smile with sharp teeth. Then her eyeballs disappeared so her eyes were dark black holes. Ava started to scratch and pull Emily’s feet while the fire grew even bigger. Emily started to cry even louder and her mom heard her. Her mom came running and when Ava heard her mother coming, she closed her eyes and disappeared. Emily’s mom finally came in and asked her what happened, but she didn’t answer. Emily’s mother just hugged her and told her to calm down and to forget everything that happened. Emily just thought, who is she, and what was she doing in the library?
The End
Hope all of you liked it and please give me and my sis feedback!!
~ XxGhostMosskitxX ♥ ♥ ♥

User Russ Clarke
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Answer: Hello!

I love it!!! But Ava is mean. But Emily i can imagine is so cute. I wish she had her mom in the first place so she didnt have to go though all of that..... Good Job!!♥

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Good Job, -Anna♥

User SteveCoffman
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Answer: I really like this

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Because of how the story went if you had a chance to continue your story I would it has a good plot to it. <3

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