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Ill give brailiest I'm writing an essay can someone please tell me if this is a good start. If its not can you please tell me what to change

here's the topic
What role did alliances play in World War II? How does this role compare to alliances in World War I?
World war one and two were very devastating times that affected many lives negatively around the world. Because of the negative results of the wars alliances were created in the hope to stop more wars in the future.

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It's a good start but, you should add more about how World War I and World War II affected People. You should add how devastating it was. But one thing you should NOT do is make it to long, because people will get thrown off and will find the passage boring.

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I think that this is a great starter

The only thing that I would change would be the part, "stop more wars in the future."

I recommend you say

prevent future wars

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