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Two great kings one in France and one in Russia…. BUT who is the best? Could it be Louis XIV or could it be peter the great? Today we will be going through who was a better king and once and for all figure out who was the better king will it be the king of France Louis XIV or will it be the king of Russia peter the great I guess you’ll just have to wait and see…

does this sound good and does it need to be fixed to make it more catchy !!! please help this is my introductery paragraph ( pleASE fix)

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you should try using better words not just simple words, so as to act as a catch phrase to viewers and yes I can see some mistakes in your sentences, I think you should try rewrite it again but this time calm down and write also don't try to impress people when you write, it could make you make lots of mistakes just be yourself

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