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Dear Mark Warner,
My name is Cody Sprague and, I have emailed you today; I come to you from a school assignment. I'm, asked whether I agree with raising the legal driving age. I agree with this law because; passing a bill to raise the driving age is an effective way to decrease teenage fatalities in traffic accidents. Firstly, teenagers are less likely to wear seatbelts. According to research and statistics show that teenagers are less likely to wear seatbelts. People would argue and say that teenagers are less likely to wear seatbelts, whether driving or not. Teenage drivers spend the mass majority of their time in cars.
Secondly, teenage drivers are driving under the influence of alcohol. Research states 70% of teenage drivers who died in underage drinking and driving accidents didn't use a seat belt. Teenagers still can get their hands on alcohol.
Lastly, teenage drivers still talk on their phones while driving. Statistics tell us that Talking on a cell phone can double the likelihood of an accident and will slow a young driver's reaction time to that of a 70-year-old.
In conclusion, the legal driving age for Virginia; should be raised because for the above reasons. Please consider my reasoning why the driving age should be raised.
Many thanks,
Cody Sprague

Answer 1

Dear Mark Warner,

My name is Cody Sprague. I emailed you today about a school assignment in which I was asked whether or not I agreed with raising the legal driving age. Personally, I agree with this law because passing a bill to raise the driving age is an effective way to decrease the number of teenage fatalities and traffic accidents. First and foremost, teenagers think they are invincible, so they are less likely to wear a seat belt. people would argue that teenagers would not wear a seat belt whether they were driving or not. However, studies show that teenager drivers spent the mass majority of there time in their cars.

Secondly, a large quantity of teenagers are driving under the influence. Research show that 70% of teenage driver who have died in a traffic accident under the influence were not wearing a seat belt. Teenagers now more than ever can get a hold of alcohol.

Lastly, teenage drivers still talk on their phones while driving. Statistics have proven that talking on a cell phone can double the likely hood of an accident and could even slow a young drivers reaction time to that of a 70-year-old.

In conclusion, the legal driving age for virginia should be raised to help to prevent all my previously stated reasons. Please consider my reasoning and if you agree, please, help to make a difference.

Many thanks,

Cody Sprague

Answer 2

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