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Pain And Regret, this is one of of my other POEMS please tell what I could change or what you liked.

I am pain
I fill your soul with rain
And I know you don’t have a drain
Because you never had a brain

I bring your past back
To were all you see is black
And your to stubborn to let go of slack
Because since is what you lack

I have a friend named regret
She’s like a cigarette
She’s a big threat
She’s has your date set

You’ll feel remorse
In a great course
And you’ll since our force
And in our source

Now you met me and regret
Do you feel any threat
Because I can bet
That your about to sweat

You’ll may think your not we’re not coming
But it is like a bird simply humming
So see you when you stop running
Because we’ll never stop

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Hi Emma, this poem is really, really good, although it’s also really deep. And deep poems tend to not have a rhyming scheme. I really like the though put into this, but it would be better if you would reduce the rhyme scheme from AAAA to ABAB,
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it's awesome keep going xD

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