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Im writing a paragraph can anyone tell me what i could add to my conclusion?

In conclusion I believe that all children should have free education world wide. It could help a country look better and let children have more learning opportunities or let them become an independent adult or a dependent adult.

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I would break apart your last sentence and leave out the piece about being a dependent adult, just say an independent adult. Also world and wide should be together, worldwide is one word. Here’s an example of something I might add on the topic.

“Providing free education worldwide not only has the possibility to improve a country’s image, but also improve the futures of many citizens. The goal of education is to prepare children for the future and for them to mature into educated and independent adults. In the long-run, offering more learning opportunities has many positive effects.”

Hope this helps!
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With certain circumstances there are ones who will never get education unless it’s free, with limited knowledge they won’t understand the basics and may not have a possible future.
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