Question

Ead the excerpt from an essay about fairy tales.

The Grimms’ fairy tales address the experiences of people who are living in difficult situations. For example, there is the story of Rapunzel. There is also the story of Hansel and Gretel, who had to escape their house in order to find food and were locked out.

Which revision would best help the author support the thesis more effectively?

The author should explain why Hansel and Gretel were locked out.
The author should explain how Rapunzel’s story fits into the thesis.
The author should add one more story as an example to support the thesis.
The author should explain why Hansel and Gretel's situation is difficult.

Answer 1

The revision that would best help the author support the thesis more effectively is the following: The author should explain how Rapunzel's story fits into the thesis.

The author first presents his thesis (The Grimms' fairy tales address the experiences of people who are living in difficult situations), and then provides two examples: Rapunzel and Hansel and Gretel. However, he only explains the latter (who had to escape their house in order to find food and were locked out.) Any reader could be confused as to why Rapunzel's story fits into the thesis, since he does not support his example with evidence.

Answer 2

The author should explain how Rapunzel’s story fits into the thesis.

Step-by-step explanation:

In the given excerpt from an essay about fairy tales, the author talks about how the Grimm brothers' tales are about people suffering in difficult situations. This particular passage from the essay is meant to show or talk about how such situations affect the heroes and heroines of their tales.

But at the same time, while referring to the hardships of the characters in the Grimm's tales, the author failed to mention a bit more detail about Rapunzel. Though the author mentions some background information about Hansel and Gretel, enough detail that connects Rapunzel to the thesis argument is not provided.

Thus, the correct answer is the second option.