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Answer: Hope this helps, add me as a friend so you can message me if you need help with other papers, im usually pretty good at editing.

Have you ever wondered about the early rights for women and people of color? Chirley Chishom was a large part of the change that (gave them more freedom to do as they wish?) In the following paragraphs we will learn more about how Chishom helped their basic rights flourish!

Shirley Chisholm was born on November 30th 1924 in New York City. She was born into an immigrant family, her father from Guyanna, and her mother from Barbados. Chirley was the oldest of her 5 other siblings. She graduated from Brooklyn Girls' High in 1942. The professors there had encouraged Chisom to consider taking up a political career. She replied by telling them that she faced a "double handicap" as she was both black, and a woman. Before she began her job working in politics, she had worked as a nursery school teacher. (her being married adds no real context to this but if you want to include it phrase it like "In 1949, she found herself married to Conrad Q. Chisholm, but they would later be divorced in 1977")

In 1968, Shirley Chisholm became the first African American congresswoman. She was also the first African American who would seek the nomination of president of the United States "from one of the two major political parties". Later she would become the second African American in the New York State Legislature. She would co-found the Unity Democratic Club in Brooklyn, and become one of the early members of the National Organization for Women. She was also very active in the National Association for the Advancement of Colored People, or the NAACP.

With all these achievements, Shirley Chisholm certainly was one of many extremely important people in the history of our nation.

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sound pretty good, lol

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