Question

I went to the shops with my friend after school. We bought lollies to eat in the park. We sat and ate the lollies together as we chatted. Another friend of ours was walking by and came over to join us. We talked about our school day and the plans we had coming up over the weekend. It was getting late and I needed to be home for Friday night tacos. I said goodbye to my friends and headed home. Task: Rewrite the passage above to make it more engaging & interesting! Consider using nouns, adjectives, verbs and adverbs to help you.​

Answer 1

It was Friday. The day all students were looking forward to for it was the start of the weekend. As the bells of liberation rang, my friends and I dashed out of our class. While sprinting out of school, we looked at each other and glared into each other's eyes, which were shining bright. We both gave each other a subtle nod as we knew what had to be done. After escaping school, we went to the market in search for one item. Lollies. Both of us were avid lolipop enjoyers and on obtaining them from the shop we sighed in relief. The school day was over.

Sucking on the lollies, we strolled aroung at the nearby park: talking about our day. As we chatted, I saw a recognizable face. It was another of our friend. He was also looking at us. On realizing it was us, he bolted towards us. So three unbreakable trio was united and we spoke about our school day and weekend plans.

Speaking of the weekend plans, I realized I was getting late for my favourite part about Friday: Friday night tacos. I bid goodbye to my friends and left for home.

Answer 2

After school, Inayah decided to stay in town with friends and enjoyed some lollies at the picnic tables near the basketball courts. They chatted, and another friend joined them to discuss their school day and weekend plans. Inayah eventually said goodbye and went home for Friday night tacos.

Step-by-step explanation:

After school, Inayah decided to stay in town with some friends instead of going home. They sat at the picnic tables near the basketball courts, where they chatted and enjoyed their lollies. As they were sitting and chatting, another friend joined them and they talked about their school day and upcoming weekend plans. Eventually, it got late and Inayah needed to go home for Friday night tacos, so she said goodbye to her friends and headed home.