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Which sentence is the best
revision of the original to giv
concrete detail about the
subject of your biography?
A. sentence 1
B. sentence 4
C. sentence 2
D. sentence 3
Original Sentence:
Jo practiced everyday in hopes she could make the
cheerleading team.
Revised Sentences:
[1] Jo practiced her tumbling everyday in hopes she
could make the cheerleading team.
[2] Jo prepared so she could try to make the
cheerleading team.
[3] Jo watched her diet and lifted weights everyday so
she could try out for the cheerleading team.