Question

(1) The accomplishment, not the effort, is what impresses people. (2) No one has ever bin hired to be a dentist because you worked hard in dental school. (3) Instead, one has to accomplish the task of graduating from a school of dentistry, that’s how you become a dentist. (4) Likewise, no one would ever hire a struggling actor, no matter how talented, to host a TV show. (5) Only an actor with name recognition and several movie or TV appearances would be considered for it. (6) Thinking that effort is more important than luck is like thinking that water isn’t needed to have a swimming pool.

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Answer 1

Which revision would improve sentence 2?

No one has ever been hired to be a dentist because you worked hard in dental school.

Which revision would improve sentence 3?

Instead, one has to accomplish graduating from a school of dentistry, that’s how you become a dentist.

Which revision would improve sentence 5?

Only an actor with name recognition and several hit movies or TV shows would be considered for it.