Question

Read the following excerpt from a student essay. How can the writer best improve his or her

organization?
Ponies are a type of horse, but there are significant differences between ponies and
horses. Ponies are generally shorter than horses. Ponies also tend to live longer than
horses. Horses are considered to be over fifty-eight inches tall, and ponies are less than
that. Horses usually live to be twenty-five to thirty years old. Most ponies live to be
thirty-five or even forty.
A- by reordering sentences to keep related ideas together
B- by moving the first sentence to the end of the paragraph

Answer 1

A- by reordering sentences to keep related ideas together.

The writer can best improve their organization by choosing option A, which involves reordering sentences to keep related ideas together. Currently, the paragraph jumps between discussing the differences between ponies and horses and their respective lifespans, which can be confusing for the reader. By grouping related ideas together, the paragraph will be more coherent and easier to follow. Option B, which suggests moving the first sentence to the end of the paragraph, does not address the underlying issue of disorganization and may make the paragraph less clear.