Question

Why kids should not be on social media

Step 2: Draft

After you look over the example of a persuasive essay that has been provided in this lesson, it's your turn to write a draft of your own.

Use your research and the graphic organizer (see the previous question) to develop a rough draft. In your rough draft, be sure to include the following:

a hook to get the reader's attention
a clear thesis statement that introduces the issue and takes a stand
clear topic sentences that introduce the argument in each body paragraph
evidence (facts, statistics, quotations, examples) that supports each argument
a counterargument to answer the opposing viewpoint
parenthetical documentation for all evidence
transitions between sentences and paragraphs
a conclusion that restates the thesis and explains what the audience should do about
the issue
a works cited list that gives MLA documentation for all sources (see Unit 7.)

Answer 1

Draft:

Social media has become an integral part of our lives. It has revolutionized the way we connect with others, share our thoughts, and get our news. However, the use of social media by children has become a topic of concern. In this essay, I will argue that children should not be on social media because it poses several risks to their physical and mental well-being.

Children are vulnerable to online predators and cyberbullying. According to a survey conducted by the National Society for the Prevention of Cruelty to Children, one in three children in the UK has experienced cyberbullying. Moreover, online predators often target children who are active on social media. They use fake profiles and manipulate children to share personal information or meet them in person. Children may not be aware of the dangers of social media and the consequences of sharing personal information online.

Another reason why children should not be on social media is that it can affect their mental health. Studies have shown that social media use is linked to anxiety, depression, and low self-esteem in children. Social media creates unrealistic expectations of beauty standards, popularity, and success. Children who are already struggling with self-esteem issues may feel inadequate and left out when they see their peers' curated lives online. Moreover, social media addiction can lead to sleep deprivation, poor academic performance, and a lack of physical activity.

Some people argue that social media can be beneficial for children as it allows them to connect with their friends and family, learn new things, and express themselves creatively. While these arguments are valid, they do not outweigh the risks associated with social media use. There are other ways for children to connect with others and learn new things that do not involve social media. Moreover, expressing oneself creatively does not require a public audience of strangers.

In conclusion, social media may be a useful tool for adults, but it poses several risks to children's physical and mental well-being. Therefore, children should not be on social media. Parents and guardians should monitor their children's online activity and encourage them to engage in other forms of socialization and learning. It is our responsibility to protect children from the dangers of social media.

Works Cited:

"Children and Social Networking." NSPCC, 2021, www.nspcc.org.uk/keeping-children-safe/online-safety/social-networking-sites/.

Riehm, Kira E et al. “Associations between social media use and mental health among young adults: A 2016 update.” American journal of epidemiology vol. 185,3 (2017): 203-211. doi:10.1093/aje/kww090.