Question

Write a paragraph narrating an anecdote from your life that relates to the topic of sports or teamwork. In your paragraph, use parenthetical elements and modifiers, such as participial and prepositional phrases. Before you submit your paragraph, edit it to be sure parenthetical elements and modifiers are used correctly and purposefully.

For full credit, be sure that your response does all of the following.

Sufficiently addresses all parts of the prompt and incorporates your learning from the lesson (from 0 to 60 points)
Provides supporting evidence from the text or resource as requested in the prompt (from 0 to 20 points)
Uses correct grammar and mechanics (from 0 to 20 points)
Please note that point values are wide-ranging and approximate, as prompt specifications vary from lesson to lesson.

Answer 1

A narrative about an underdog high school soccer team's match illustrates the importance of teamwork and camaraderie, showing how personal growth can come from collective effort.

Step-by-step explanation:

During my sophomore year of high school, our varsity soccer team (underdogs in every sense of the word) faced the reigning state champions in a match that none of us expected to win. With every sprint, pass, and tackle, the team moved as a unified entity, an example of teamwork and persistence. Soaring through the air, our goalkeeper - with hands like steel traps - miraculously saved a penalty kick, and that moment catalyzed a change in our mindset. We were determined to prevail, no matter the odds. Although we ended the game with a tie, the camaraderie and collective pride we felt were indescribable. That day, we learnt that the scoreline doesn't always define victory; sometimes, it's the spirit of collaboration and the shared joy of surpassing everyone's expectations. Indeed, personal growth occurred not on the scoreboard, but within each member of that scrappy team.

Answer 2

Throughout my youth, I was always an avid soccer player. One summer, I joined a travel team that was filled with players much older and more experienced than myself. At first, I felt intimidated and almost out of place. However, as the weeks went by, I realized that the older players had a lot to teach me. I watched their every move during games and practiced, always trying to keep up with their level of play. One day, during a particularly challenging game, I was able to apply some of the skills I had learned from the older players. I made a perfect pass to a teammate who then scored the winning goal. While I was thrilled with the victory, I was even more proud of the fact that I had applied myself and shown my teammates that I was a valuable member of the team. (Using participial phrases like "filled with players much older" and "watched their every move during games" and prepositional phrases like "during a particularly challenging game.")