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Hey can someone please check if my essay has a good introduction? Like is the thesis strong enough, any changing suggestions, add other information, any way that it has good transitions/flows good etc?
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Hey can someone please check if my essay has a good introduction? Like is the thesis strong enough, any changing suggestions, add other information, any way that it has good transitions/flows good etc? and please explain.

Hey can someone please check if my essay has a good introduction? Like is the thesis-example-1
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I think you did excellently, but you could use a hook for your opener. You go straight into the facts which is great but I need something to grab my attention.
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