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Anya is revising her informational essay and comes across this paragraph:

In fact, turkeys are quite intelligent and social: they form meaningful friendships, understand their surroundings, and are quite affectionate. Turkeys have multiple ways of communicating, including a variety of vocalizations, even purring. One time, a turkey crawled into my lap and cuddled and purred and it was the cutest thing that ever happened to me! Also, turkeys feel emotions and communicate those feelings by their heads turning blue when they're in a good mood and red when they're in a bad mood. Finally, just like humans, turkeys show love and affection and form deep friendships. Which sentence should Anya remove to revise her paragraph for coherence? Also, turkeys feel emotions and communicate those feelings by their heads turning blue when they're in a good mood and red when they're in a bad mood. In fact, turkeys are quite intelligent and social: they form meaningful friendships, understand their surroundings, and are quite affectionate. One time, a turkey crawled into my lap and cuddled and purred and it was the cutest thing that ever happened to me! Turkeys have multiple ways of communicating, including a variety of vocalizations, even purring.


Which sentence should Anya remove to revise her paragraph for coherence?

A. Also, turkeys feel emotions and communicate those feelings by their heads turning blue when they're in a good mood and red when they're in a bad mood.
B. In fact, turkeys are quite intelligent and social: they form meaningful friendships, understand their surroundings, and are quite affectionate.
C. One time, a turkey crawled into my lap and cuddled and purred and it was the cutest thing that ever happened to me!
D. Turkeys have multiple ways of communicating, including a variety of vocalizations, even purring.

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A. Also, turkeys feel emotions and communicate those feelings by their heads turning blue when they're in a good mood and red when they're in a bad mood.

In this paragraph, sentence A is the least relevant and does not add to the overall coherence of the paragraph. It introduces a new idea about turkeys' emotional states and communication without providing any supporting information or examples. Removing this sentence would improve the coherence of the paragraph by allowing the focus to remain on the general intelligence and social behavior of turkeys.
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I think it's C. It shifts from an informational text to an anecdote.
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