Question

First and foremost, they received an ***annual pension payment. The amount of the pension*** has been reviewed and changed a number of times, most recently to reflect the salary of a high-level government executive.

Which of the following would NOT be an acceptable way to revise and combine the underlined portion of the sentence above?
A. annual pension payment, the amount of which
B. annual pension payment; the amount of the pension
C. annual pension payment; over the years since 1958, the amount of the pension
D. annual pension payment, the amount of the pension

Answer 1

Option C would not be an acceptable way to revise and combine the underlined portion of the sentence as it introduces unnecessary information about the history of the pension. Option (C) is correct.

Step-by-step explanation:

The question asks which of the following options is NOT an acceptable way to revise and combine the underlined portion of the sentence. The underlined portion is the annual pension payment. The amount of the pension. The correct answer would be option C, which changes the meaning of the sentence by adding unnecessary information about the history of the pension. The other options maintain the clarity and conciseness of the sentence, without introducing any new information that is not relevant to the intended meaning.

During revising, you add, cut, move, or change information to improve content. During editing, you take a second look at the words and sentences you used to express your ideas and fix any problems in grammar, punctuation, and sentence structure.

He soon came to revise his opinion of the profession. Some of their prices were higher than their competitors' so they revised their prices accordingly. It was right that estimates were revised when new information became available. Three editors handled the work of revising the articles for publication.