Question

The writer is going to add the following paragraph to the letter.

(1) I will be a good intern at the American Power Company.
(2) I like to learn.
(3) Last year I had a summer job in a research lab.
(4) My boss said that I work hard.
(5) I hope to be a research scientist one day.
(6) As a scientist, I want to work on energy projects:
(7) I have a lot of free time in the summer
Which sentence should be taken out of the paragraph?

Answer 1

Sentence (7) "I have a lot of free time in the summer" should be removed from the paragraph, as it does not contribute to demonstrating the student's qualifications or interest in the American Power Company internship.

Step-by-step explanation:

In the paragraph provided by the student, sentence (7) "I have a lot of free time in the summer" should be taken out. This sentence is less relevant to the goal of the paragraph, which is to demonstrate the student’s suitability and desire for the internship at the American Power Company. Instead, the paragraph should maintain a focus on the student’s skills, work ethic, and career aspirations related to the internship, which would be more convincing to the employer.

For a strong application letter, a student should highlight relevant experiences, interests, and skills that align with the internship’s requirements and objectives. Mentioning their availability in terms of free time does not directly address any specific qualifications or relevant personal attributes. Instead, elaborating on specific experiences or abilities that would benefit the company is recommended.