To enhance the paragraph, consider the following edits for clarity and structure do the following
- Ensure consistent tense usage throughout the text.
- Enhance the flow by connecting related thoughts.
- Introduce variety in sentence structure to avoid repetition.
- Clarify the conclusion
- Double-check punctuation and grammar
How to edit the sentence
Last August, realizing fatigue, I sought relief from the scorching Summer heat by driving North to the mountains.
Avoid repetition in expressing the desire for cooler air and shade while connecting related thoughts for better flow.
Emphasize the overwhelming nature of the weather conditions by diversifying the description of the Summer's challenges.
Specify the reasons why the mountain trip stood out, highlighting the rejuvenation experienced from the refreshing change.
Ensure accuracy in punctuation and grammar while maintaining a consistent past tense throughout the paragraph.
Question
It was a hot dry day last august when I realized that I was tired of Summer. On that day I came to the conclusion that Summer days were too warm, too long and too sunny. I decided to get in my car and drive North to the mountains for some cool air which I love and shady trees. It was the best decision I made all Summer.
Write three to five sentences explaining what should be done to edit this paragraph for errors.