Question

Read the sentences from a student’s essay about “The Treasure of Lemon Brown.”

In the beginning of the story, Greg is focused on playing basketball for the Scorpions. His father wants him to study harder and lectures him about the importance of doing well in school.

Which revision should the student make to improve the flow of ideas in this paragraph?

Add the transition “However” between the sentences.
Remove the phrase “In the beginning of the story.”
Replace the phrase “lectures him” with “speaks to him.”
Replace the word “focused” with “concentrating.”

Answer 1

it not B it not C it not D

Step-by-step explanation:

it A

Answer 2

Add the transition “However” between the sentences.

Step-by-step explanation:

'However', is a conjunction used to join two independent clauses. It is used to indicate that there are opposing ideas or contrasts which the writer wishes to highlight. The sentence above written by the student, presents a contrast of ideas.

While the first sentence indicates what Greg wants, the second sentence shows what his father prefers. These two contrasting ideas can be joined with the word, 'however'.