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Does this make sense?:

"The closer I came to the crickets, the more thirsty my ears became, crying for more music."

(and if it doesn't make sense, could you help me find the mistake and rephrase?)

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It makes sense to me. But instead of “the more thirsty my ears became” you could say “ the thirstier my ears became”
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