Question

Babysitting is the perfect summer job for me.

I get to be outside.
I get fresh air and exercise.
Each day, I take the kids to the swimming pool where I swim with them.
Each day, I take the kids to the park where I run around with them.
Each day we come home exhausted and happy.
I get paid for having fun!
Which revision below most effectively uses transition words to combine the sentences into a coherent paragraph?

Babysitting is the perfect summer job for me because of fresh air and exercise. Each day I do the following: take the kids to the swimming pool where I swim with them, take them to the park where I run around with them, come home exhausted and happy, and get paid for having fun!

Babysitting is the perfect summer job for me because I go outside in the fresh air and exercise. I take the kids to the pool where I swim with them. Similarly, I take them to the park where we all run around. Likewise, we come home, exhausted and happy. In addition, I get paid for having fun!

Babysitting is the perfect summer job for me. It allows me to be outside where I can get fresh air and exercise. Each day, I take the kids to the pool and swim with them. Then, we go to the park and run around. Finally, we come home, exhausted and happy. In addition, I get paid for having all this fun!

Babysitting is the perfect summer job for me. First, it allows me to be outside. Second, I get fresh air and exercise. Each day, I take the kids to the pool where first, I swim with them. Second, I take them to the park where we all run around. Third, we come home, exhausted and happy. Fourth, I get paid for having fun!

Answer 1

The best revision for the paragraph effectively uses sequential and additive transitions to combine activities into a coherent narrative about babysitting as an ideal summer job.

Step-by-step explanation:

The student is looking for the revision that most effectively uses transition words to combine sentences into a coherent paragraph. The third option is the most effective because it introduces a logical sequence with transitions that guide the reader through the daily activities: 'It allows me to be outside' to swimming with the kids, then running around in the park, and concluding with returning home exhausted yet happy. The transitions used are sequential ('Then', 'Finally') and additive ('In addition'), which improve the flow of the passage in a way that is engaging and clear.