Question

Read this sentence, and identify the changes that would make it easier to read. The game was tricky and we were down by one point when the clock said the buzzer was about to go off so Chase made an impossible shot.

Which of the passages below is the clearest and smoothest revision of this sentence?
A.) In a tricky game we were down by one point when the clock said the buzzer was about to go off. Chase made an impossible shot.
B.) We were down by one point in a tricky game when Chase made an impossible shot just as the buzzer was about to go off.
C.) The game was tricky. We were down by one point. The clock said the buzzer was about to go off. Chase made an impossible shot
D.) The game was tricky, and we were down by one point. Then, when the buzzer was about to go off, Chase made an impossible shot.

Answer 1

Option B is the clearest revision of the sentence, providing a smooth flow and easy-to-follow sequence of events without the original sentence's run-on structure.

Step-by-step explanation:

To identify the clearest and smoothest revision of the sentence "The game was tricky and we were down by one point when the clock said the buzzer was about to go off so Chase made an impossible shot," option B is the best choice. This revision reads: We were down by one point in a tricky game when Chase made an impossible shot just as the buzzer was about to go off. It is clearer because it avoids the run-on nature of the original sentence and provides a smooth sequence of events that's easy to follow. It sets the scene and then quickly moves to the action, maintaining clarity and suspense.