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PLEASE HELP CAN SOMEONE HELP ME FIX MY RUN-ON SENTENCES AND MY MISSING COMMAS OR SEMICOLON? HERE IS MY ESSAY I NEED SOMEONE TO HELP ME WITH MY WRITING ASAP IT IS DUE TODAY AT 5:00.

A time when I did something surprising was when I threw a party when my parents were on vacation. I threw a party when my parents were on vacation because they were coming back from their trip to Arizona, and they had a long trip there so I and my older sister decided to go out and shop for decorations to throw their party. I decided to take this into consideration since I did nothing over the weekend so I planned it out. I was in the 5th grade when my teacher was asking everyone what they did over the weekend she started calling out students' names. It was my turn my heart started to beat fast and faster as I kept thinking I told her that "I did nothing over the weekend because my parents were on vacation to Arizona she replied "Nothing seriously you did nothing" and I replied "Yes". My parents just came home from Arizona and are 5 minutes away from the house while I and my sister still have not finished decorating. My heart is racing I am asking myself questions like are they going to come inside the house and ruin their surprise or are we going to surprise them? All we had to finish was the sign saying "Welcome home" I quickly wrote that on the poster that we bought we had everything set up I wrote in a colorful way. I can feel it I was so nervous I and my sister had to quickly hide but we did find a good hiding spot. I heard the door knob twisting I was getting ready to let the sign dangle when the door finally flew open and my sister shouted "WELCOME HOME". My parents were shocked that they thought that after their vacation they would just come home take a shower and relax but they did not know that we had a surprise waiting for them.

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A time when I did something surprising was when I threw a party when my parents were on vacation. I threw a party when my parents were on vacation because they were coming back from their trip to Arizona, and they had a long trip there so I and my older sister decided to go out and shop for decorations to throw their party. I decided to take this into consideration since I did nothing over the weekend, so I planned it out. I was in the 5th grade when my teacher was asking everyone what they did over the weekend. She started calling out students' names. It was my turn my heart started to beat faster and faster as I kept thinking I told her that "I did nothing over the weekend because my parents were on vacation to Arizona she replied "Nothing seriously you did nothing" and I replied "Yes". My parents just came home from Arizona and are 5 minutes away from the house while I and my sister still have not finished decorating. My heart is racing. I am asking myself questions like are they going to come inside the house and ruin their surprise or are we going to surprise them? All we had to finish was the sign saying "Welcome home" I quickly wrote that on the poster that we bought we had everything set up. I wrote in a colorful way. I can feel it. I was so nervous I and my sister had to quickly hide, but we did find a good hiding spot. I heard the doorknob twisting. I was getting ready to let the sign dangle when the door finally flew open and my sister shouted, "WELCOME HOME! ". My parents were shocked that they thought that after their vacation they would just come home, take a shower and relax, but they did not know that we had a surprise waiting for them.

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I'm sorry if this isn't as good as you want but I tried my best with correcting sentences,periods,punctuation and commas

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