Question

What's wrong with this email excerpt?

a. It's too long and detailed.
b. It lacks a proper greeting.
c. The writer's availability is unclear.
d. It's overly formal.

Answer 1

The email excerpt has multiple issues, including not addressing the correct recipients, lacking a proper greeting and subject line, and being overly formal.

Step-by-step explanation:

The problems with the email excerpt are:

1. It's being sent to the entire staff list when it would be more effective to send the email to only those who can answer the question.
2. It lacks a proper greeting, making it unclear who should be responding.
3. There is no subject line, so recipients won't know what the email is about without opening it.
4. The writer hasn't capitalized the first letter of the sentence.
5. The email comes across as rude because there is no salutation or appreciation of future efforts from her co-workers.
6. The writer gives no timeframe for when she needs an answer.
7. The tone of the email is overly formal.