In George's narrative. First, George needs to include himself as a character in the narrative to provide a personal perspective. For example, George could say, "In my experience, life can be both visible and invisible." Next, George should provide background information about Sue to give readers a better understanding of her role in the narrative. George could mention Sue's interests, experiences, or relationship to the main theme. Additionally, George needs to add a time relationship between sentences 1 and 2 to create a logical flow. For instance, George could say, "When I first met Sue, life seemed invisible, but as time went on, it became clear that it could also be miserable." Lastly, George should change the pronoun "she" to the pronoun "they" to be inclusive of all genders. This allows for a more diverse and inclusive narrative.