Question

Read the excerpt from an essay about fairy tales.

The Grimms’ fairy tales address the experiences of people who are living in difficult situations. For example, there is the story of Rapunzel. There is also the story of Hansel and Gretel, who had to escape their house in order to find food and were locked out.

Which revision would best help the author support the thesis more effectively?

Answer 1

Answer: The best revision would help the author support the thesis more effectively as follows: The author should explain how Rapunzel's story fits the thesis. The author first presents his thesis (the Grimm's fairy tale tells about the experiences of people living in difficult circumstances), then gives two examples: Rapunzel and Hansel and Gretel. However, it only explains the second case (who had to run away from home to find food and was locked out.) Any reader might be confused as to why Rapunzel's story is appropriate. with the thesis, because it does not support the evidence for its example.