Question

Can someone please edit this one paragraph that got a grade of 1 get a grade of 2????

Ghandi’s non-violent personality is a rhetorical device all unto itself. It makes him look far more approachable to the receiver of the letter. One example starts on line 64. Ghandi states, “If you think that there is any substance in my letter, and if you will care to discuss matters with me, and if to that end you would like me to postpone publication of this letter, I shall gladly refrain on receipt of a telegram to that effect soon after this reaches you.” Ghandhi doesn’t threaten the British government, he offers to not publish the letter so that they can sit down and have a civil talk about it. On top of that, he has it hand-delivered by an English friend. He is definitely far more inviting than the Americans were in their Declaration of Independence.

Answer 1

Ghandi’s non-violent personality is a rhetorical device all unto itself. It makes him look beyond approachable to the beneficiary of the report. One example starts on line 64. Ghandi states, “If you think that there is any substance in my letter, and if you will care to discuss matters with me, and if to that end you would like me to postpone publication of this letter, I shall gladly refrain on receipt of a telegram to that effect soon after this reaches you.” Ghandhi doesn’t pressurize the British government, he propounds to not publish the letter so that they can sit down and have a decent talk. On top of that, he has it hand-delivered by an English companion. He is definitely far more inviting than the Americans were in their Declaration of Independence.

Step-by-step explanation:

I didnt change much i just put different words that sound smarter